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Week 8 Peer Review 2 SubmissionPeer Review AssignmentPeer reviews should provide feedback to a peer on the criteria expected in the paper. The Feedback Form is located at the bottom. Follow these instructions:1. Use the essay paper below (Assignment 3) complete the Peer Review Feedback Form.2. Comment on all criteria, noting strengths and / or areas for improvement on the feedback form.As you read the paper, address these criteria:3. Provide positive feedback, where appropriate, on the criteria.4. Identify areas for improvement, where appropriate, and recommend improvements.The specific course learning outcomes associated with this assignment are:o Recognize the elements and correct use of a thesis statement.o Recognize transitional words, phrases, and sentences.o Identify effective sentence variety and word choice.o Identify positive qualities and opportunities for improvement in writing samples.o Analyze the rhetorical strategies of ethos, pathos, logos in writing samples and for incorporation into essays or presentations.o Correct grammatical and stylistic errors consistent with Standard Written Englisho Recognize how to organize ideas with transitional words, phrases, and sentences.
Assignment Three: Government Regulation on Pit Bulls: A Crime or a Punishment?
Prepared by: Allison Rada
• Breed Specific Legislation (BSL) is one that concerns dog victims, dog owners, and communities alike. For years the media has brought attention to the violent acts of pit bulls and similar breeds. Recently, certain states have enacted BSL in order to protect their communities. However, victims of dog attacks are no longer the only victims as BSL has gone into effect. Families have lost their own dogs, members of their family, to euthanasia because they are deemed “dangerous.” State or local governments should not enact different laws regarding certain animals as the breed is not responsible for the acts but the owners and behaviors.• BSL is a statute or regulation that is directed toward one or more specific breeds that are known as “dangerous” (Weiss, 2011). The first form of regulation started in 1980 when Florida’s City Commission passed an ordinance requiring pit bull owners to complete registration forms and prove public liability insurance of $25,000 (Weiss, 2011). Four years later, a New Mexico town and Cincinnati, Ohio passed regulation regarding pit bulls (Weiss, 2011). Today over 700 U.S. cities have enacted BSL (“State-by-State,” n.d.). Pit bulls are descendants of an English bull-baiting dog, a dog bred to bite and face larger animals; once baiting large animals was banned people started dog fighting instead (“Pit Bull Cruelty,” n.d.). The pit bulls that were not used for dog fighting were the perfect family pet due to their affection and gentle demeanor with children (“Pit Bull Cruelty,” n.d.). Though dog fighting is a felony offense in all 50 states, it still has a strong subculture; owners will prepare their pit bulls for dog fighting by encouraging aggression on other dogs and animals as well as starving and beating them to encourage aggression giving them the reputation of being “inherently dangerous” (“Pit Bull Cruelty,” n.d.). Animals are a product of their environment, so being raised to behave in a certain manner is the result of the owner and behavior rather than the individual animal. Pit bulls that are not raised for dog fighting are gentle creatures and service dogs. If the pit bulls are banned then the same individuals will find another breed to train to behave in the same demeanor.• The BSL was enacted due to specific occurrences of foul pit bull behaviors. Almost seven years ago, Dominic Solesky was mauled by a pit bull in the alley behind his rowhouse in Towson, Maryland causing trauma surgery at John Hopkins Hospital and a year of rehabilitation (Knezevich, 2013). As the family was in court for five years trying to get restitution for Dominic’s injuries, legislators in the House and Senate set liability for all dog owners if the victim were under thirteen years old; this has caused apartment complexes to choose between their pets and their homes, homeowners associations drawing up policies to ban pit bulls, and shelters seeing an increase in pit bulls (Knezevich, 2013). In 2011, a pregnant woman died due to blood loss and shock, one of her pit bull pets being the sole attacker; her husband who arrived home from work to find his wife unconscious on the floor stated that he doesn’t blame the dog and plans on burying his wife with their dog’s cremated remains in her casket and further went out to say it was not the breed’s fault (“Dog Bite Fatality,” 2011). Though in these situations a pit bull was the attacker, from 1965 until 2001 there have been at least 36 different breeds responsible for a fatal attack; when taking the registered dog population into consideration with the number of dog bites, pit bulls actually came in at the bottom of the list at .0012 percent (“The Truth,” n.d.). The American Canine Temperament Testing Society conducted testing on several different breeds and the results determined that pit bulls achieved a passing rating of 83.9 percent, a rating higher than Beagles at 78.2 percent and Golden Retrievers at 83.2 percent (“The Truth,” n.d.). These statistics are further proof that the breed is not responsible for the attacks, but the behaviors taught on to them as well as their owners.• Pit bulls have such a poor reputation, one would not believe them to also be service dogs or helpful to people. In Prince George’s County in Maryland where a breed ban exists, last spring Danielle Guglieimi was told she had two days to send her service pit bull Storm elsewhere (Greenwood, 2013). Sparing her pit bull’s life, she did just that. After she suffered injuries from falls while without her service dog, a judge ruled that the American Disabilities Act takes precedence over the breed ban, so service dogs in that county are not included in the ban (Greenwood, 2013). Service dogs go through extensive training in order to be fully prepared to handle the responsibilities it brings so through training, Storm and other pit bulls were taught the behaviors of being a service dog rather than an aggressive dog. A pit bull named TaterTot was rescued as a foster dog to his new owner; during the night TaterTot began to bark and whimper running between his owner and her child. When she checked on Peyton, her child was incoherent and barely breathing. She took him to the emergency room where it was determined his blood sugar levels had crashed to a dangerous low (Dicker, 2013). If not for TaterTot, Peyton may not have survived the night. Dogs that are “inherently dangerous,” which according to the breed ban is all pit bulls, would not tolerate being a service dog and would not cause commotion in order to save a child’s life.• Today there are two states that regulate dangerous dogs without specifying a breed. The statute in Michigan regulates the dog behavior instead of the breed; in Florida their law proscribes types of behavior by dogs that are subject to penalty, defining dangerous dogs as those which have “aggressively bitten, attacked, or endangered or has inflicted severe injury on a human being on public or private property” as well as when unprovoked approached a person on public grounds with attitude of attack (Weiss, 2011). In early 2006 Aurora, Colorado enacted that restricted breeds, American pit bull terrier, American Staffordshire terrier, and Staffordshire bull terrier, be destroyed with the exception of owners being “grandfathered” in meeting requirements (Johansson, 2013). Since that time, 1,158 dogs have been destroyed as a result of that ban (Johansson, 2013). Interestingly enough, the number of dog bites have not declined. City records show that the number of reported dog bites in Aurora have remained the same over a ten year period, about 200 a year; however, the number of dog bites from restricted breeds have decreased to less than 10 a year (Johansson, 2013). This is a solid example as to why breed bans are not effective at preventing dog bites.• Referring to the example of Michigan regulation citing the behavior of biting as the root of the regulation rather than the actual breed, it recognizes that other breeds are capable of the same serious aggression (Weiss, 2011). The University of Colorado School of Medicine in Aurora conducted a study in 2010 and found that mixed breeds and Labrador retrievers were the cause of majority of the dog bites (Johansson, 2013). From the examples presented as well as many others, the breed is not the cause of the crimes. Labrador retrievers can be classified as the perfect family pet; therefore, their reputation will surprise people to find their participation in dog bites. Instead, hold the dog owner responsible for the behaviors they teach their dog and allow their dog to display; hold the dog owner accountable for allowing their dog to run wild on the streets without supervision. Government officials need to hold those responsible for allowing the dog bites to occur even if it’s the more difficult or costly way, it’s the way that could save human as well as dog lives.References:• 2011 dog bite fatality: Pregnant Pacifica woman killed by family pit bull. (2011, August 15).• Dogsbite.org. Retrieved February 2, 2014, from http://blog.dogsbite.org/2011/08/2011-• fatality-pregnant-pacifica-woman.html• Breed-specific laws state-by-state. (n.d.). Dogsbite.org. Retrieved February 2, 2014, from• http://www.dogsbite.org/legislating-dangerous-dogs-state-by-state.php• Dicker, R. (2013, October 9). Rescued pit bull saves new owner’s 4-year-old son in Minneapolis.• The Huffington Post. Retrieved February 2, 2014, from http://www.huffingtonpost.com• /2013/10/09/rescued-pit-bull-saves-boy-minneapolis_n_4070101.html• Greenwood, A. (2013, October 7). Maryland Judge orders county with pit bull ban to return• service dog. The Huffington Post. Retrieved February 2, 2014, from• http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2013/10/07/prince-georges-county-pit-bull-service-• dog_n_4057528.html• Johansson, B. (2013, November 14). Aurora’s ban on pit bulls after critics rally to Stallone’s• side. Aurora Sentinel. Retrieved February 2, 2014, from http://www.aurorasentinel.com• /news/city-council-likely-revisit-auroras-ban-pit-bulls-critics-rally-stallones-side/• Knezevich, A. (2013, April 10). Maryland pit bull legislation: Solesky family, at the center of• liability controversy, disappointed lawmakers did not come to agreement. The Huffington• Post.RetrievedFebruary 2, 2014, from http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2013/04/10/• maryland-pit-bull-legislation_n_3050640.html• Pit bull cruelty. (n.d.). ASPCA. Retrieved February 2, 2014, from http://www.aspca.org/fight-• cruelty/dog-fighting/pit-bull-cruelty• The truth about pit bulls. (n.d.). Mid-America Bully Breed rescue. Retrieved February 2, 2014,• from http://mabbr.org/pit-bull-ownership/the-truth-about-pit-bulls/• Weiss, L. (2011). Breed-Specific Legislation in the United States. Retrieved February 2, 2014,• from http://www.animallaw.info/articles/aruslweiss2001.htmAppendix A: Peer Review Feedback Form 2Criteria Comments+ Strengths < Areas for Improvement1 Provide an appropriate title and an interesting opening paragraph to appeal to your stated audience (appeal with logic, ethics, or emotion).2 Included a defensible, relevant thesis statement clearly in the first paragraph.3 Describe the history and status of the issue and provide an overview of the problem(s) that need to be addressed. This should be one or two (1-2) paragraphs.4 Explain the first problem (economic, social, political, environmental, complexity, inequity, ethical/moral, etc.) and provide support for your claims. This should be one or two (1-2) paragraphs5 Explain the second problem (economic, social, political, environmental, complexity, inequity, ethical/moral, etc.) and provide support for your claims. This should be one or two (1-2) paragraphs.6 Explain the third problem (economic, social, political, environmental, complexity, inequity, ethical/moral, etc.) and provide support for your claims. This should be one or two (1-2) paragraphs.7 Use effective transitional words, phrases, and sentences.8 Provide a concluding paragraph /transitional paragraph that summarizes the proposed solution and its advantages.9 Develop a coherently structured paper with an introduction, body, and conclusion.10 Clarity, writing mechanics, grammar, and formatting requirements11 Support advantage claims with at least three (3) quality relevant references.12 Other